Does anyone think my poem is good?

Question

in my new college form is a girl and she has lovely eyes :) i wrote it for her but i wont give it to her

Blue bliss

Crafty eyes by now persist

streams on the river of blue bliss,

caught me again i wish longer

of that bejeweled wonder,

and when they met at glance

was his eyes to her trance,

just a glimpse, a second still

look up into her blue eyes i will.

Answer 1

i like it allot but u think it has the potential to be longer and maybe tell a little more of a story, but i like it i think u should give it to her

wonderful job and good luck:)

Answer 2

I like it! but how ironic, I think, that we don't ever give or show any of our poems to the ones they were written for or inspired by. Isn't it funny? We labor our brains to create at the least a short whimsical thought but then never give it to the intended. From there we let it go, look back at it as stupid then throw it out. Funny...

But I do like your poem, it's very illustrative. Thanks!

Answer 3

OMG that was amazing!!!

Answer 4

i really like it! at least up until the last line... that could use a different wording. But don't listen to me!! give this poem to the girl!!!!