Does this Dorsimbra poem follow the rules of punctuation?

Question

Punctuation

by Elaine Polin

“Of punctuation.” I’ll say, “I’m the Queen!!!!”

Since commas, colons:, hyphens--, I adore;

Oft’ when I nudge them, they say, “You are mean!!!!”

I cannot bear to do this any more.

If they would just

re-read their stuff,

I could die

a happy woman!!!!!!

But fate is such that I will be constrained

To punctuate until my dying day

And when St. Peter asks what I’ve done well

“Of punctuation,” I’ll say, “I’m the Queen.!!!!”

This “poem” illustrates that it takes more than form, meter, rhyme, or even punctuation to create a real poem. Compare this thingy, which DOES follow the rules to:

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Aqk.fW177QA4cCbjCfNBvL7ty6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20080825220524AA8RGXz

Answer 1

I think you would make a better princess than a queen.(smile)

When I see Dorsimbra I think of a a simulated bra shaped like dorsal fins. Is that possible? In any case I am sure that's not what you meant.

I did enjoy the poem, it was a good read.

note: I did look it up and for those that don't know and want to know here is a link.

http://www.writing.com/main/view_item/it...

The Dorsimbra was created by three people; Eve Braden, Frieda Dorris, and Robert Simonton. How did they come up with the name "Dorsimbra?"

hint: check out the first letters of their last name.

Answer 2

You are indeed the Punc Queen!!!!!

I, myself, am a great lover of the little squiggly critters which add

so much to writing...and I also see your point!!!!!

Thanks for the link!

Answer 3

Ha Ha! Punc Queen, That's funny...

Answer 4

I'm sticking to my guns. Every attempt to use proper punctuation should be made. I'm not saying let it get in the way when the thoughts are flowing, but get it in there before sending it off to the world.

I'm no expert at all the rules but ignorance is no excuse. I see the point you are trying to make, however.  

Answer 5

I used to be the "comma splice" queen, but I lost crown and title some time during college.  Great Dorsimbra...gotta love punctuation.

Answer 6

All Hail "Cleopunctra, Queen of the Line!" LOL

or better still

"Empress Nipolelaine!"

Answer 7

The second stanza is intense. I know that my punctuation is (very lousy). Your punctuation is perfect, so this Dorsimbra follows the rules of punctuation; and your point is clear. For the title, I don't know. It seems that there are a lot of contenders out there, not to mention those longing for King-ship!

Answer 8

And why or why do we need the stupid little marks and dashes and periods and colons and semicolons and other devices when we can just write like this with but a capitalized beginning and one simple ending called a period.

Now tell the truth, confess...how many blue pens do you own?  lol A fun read.