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Does this poem suck?

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Once a familiar face

Now intertwined in the crowd

Faith is forever gone

What is now found?

Loneliness is my home, my sun and my moon

It is all i know

Since the loss of you

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That's very profound and sappy like a maple tree tap putting out it's delicious love syrup... FOR MY PANCAKES!
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nice..
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Did you write it? If so, I think it's good...

I like how you don't worry about the rhyming so much. It's really the flow that's important.

I think it's a nice beginning.

If you worked with it more, it could become something very good.
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I'd agree with the first answer, about siz out of ten. Well, it certainly doesn't suck, it's kind of cool. It isn't like WOE, that's so DEEP.but that isn't bad at all, it's nice and flows well.
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kinda odd.......
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yea u should work on the end of it and i know that rhyming aint a big thing but u should work on that too..
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Sad :(

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Now intertwined in crowds

Since loosing you

i would do it like that

but i love it!!
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6 or 7/10
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i wouldn't say it sux but i wasn'e like omg this is the greatest thing ive ever read

but poetry is a very personal thing and i think it is hard for people to judge it
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I think you have a sense where your going with this. I only suggest to make it more longer. Best of Luck!!
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Sounds kinda cheesy, but its well written.
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It is a good one. The emotions of sadness and loneliness are evident. Having lost a few people this year that I love and care for, this poem strikes home for me. Keep up the good work and always write from your heart.
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XD This is awesome! good work :D

like pixel art...
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The Poem is fine, and I dont think ur a professional poet so you shouldnt compare yourself to pro's... but here's a poem by Gwendolyn Brooks, I personally hate it, but you can form your own opinions

We Real Cool - by G. Brooks

THE POOL PLAYERS.

SEVEN AT THE GOLDEN SHOVEL.

We real cool. We

Left school. We

Lurk late. We

Strike straight. We

Sing sin. We

Thin gin. We

Jazz June. We

Die soon.
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