Does this sentence make sense? If not, why not?

Question

I chose to read this book as I was intrigued by the extent that the characters were conditioned and socialised. This gave me greater insight into the way in which morals and views, put upon us as children can affect us throughout life; whether they are good or bad.

Answer 1

It would be better if five areas are corrected and the two sentences re- written this way:

I chose to read this book as I was intrigued by the extent to which the characters were conditioned and socialised. This gave me greater insight into the way in which morals and views, whether good or bad and taught to us as children, could affect us throughout life.

Watch the use of commas and the use of the past tense 'could'. The phrase 'whether good or bad' refer to 'morals and views', not 'children' and should therefore be placed immediately after them, for better clarity.    

Answer 2

Yes.

Answer 3

In my opinion it looks correct  i am not sure whats wrong with it.

Answer 4

It does make a lot of sense.Provided u have understood the sent.Yes characters do influence ones lives provided u pick up the good points, and make use of it in yr personal life  

Answer 5

The first sentence looks off..."by the extent" seems an inappropriate phrase, we don't generally speak like that...the next sentence is fine.

Answer 6

In which morals and views do what? Either there should not be a comma there, or you should add a comma after children.

Answer 7

Yes it makes sense.

Answer 8

Makes perfect sense and also is completely right

Answer 9

The last semicolon should be a standard comma.  Other than that it sounds fine.

Answer 10

yes

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Answer 11

it makes sense.