Does this sound good for a picture book?

Question

Page 1: English man reads to son about the city of New York. The kid has a thought bubble on his head picturing the Empire State Building in a magical way.

Page 2: Father takes son to se Big Ben. Kid is not impressed and is wearing an I LOVE NY t-shirt.

Page 3: Kid (now a young man) is looking out of a plane window and sees the City Of NY and the ES Building.

Page 4: Boy is now in a business and he looks out of his window and sees The Empire State Building opposite. (he's not quite there yet!)

Page 5: He finishes work and he's now at the bottom of the ES building. A tramp is sitting on the ground. He gives him change.

Page 6: he's now standing on top of the ES Building

Page 7: A view from the ES Building

Page 8: He has a kid of his own and he's reading a book about London to her. She has a bubble over her head dreaming of Big Ben in a magical way.

Okay, please tell me what you think and what improvements need to be made. I need to create a picture book for my first Uni Project and I'm scared!!

Answer 1

yes, this sounds good. i hope you get it published.

Answer 2

aw that sounds cute... i really like the idea.  

Answer 3

It sounds very good! I especially like how the start and the finish are pretty much the name and the book could go in circles.

Children would enjoy this book :).

P.S. What are you studying in uni?