Does this work?

Question

if you died tomorrow

i would too

Cause I wouldnt Be able to live,

without you?

does that work?

Answer 1

It would work,however your poem is literally short.It seems like this poem you had written is the first element of the poem.Please write more.

Answer 2

yes. the revised version is fine.

I just hope it did not take more than a miniute.

I have done a second verse for you.

if you died tomorrow

i would too

Cause I wouldnt be able

to live,without you?

As conjoined twins

we are, you see

interdependent

Medically.

Sick eh!

Answer 3

yer it works actually its quite good did u make it up urself coz i've never heard it before?