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The University Named Life

Life is not about comparing. Life is not about to become the richest in the world. But life is about enjoying. This is how I view life. I often heard people say something like “My life is unfair, it’s sad”, but in my opinion, I think that they just don’t understand the true meaning of it and how to enjoy life. Or maybe it’s just me who is too sensitive to think about these things. What I’m trying to say is life unpredictable, and it’s a combination of happiness and sadness.

A lot of people think that we shouldn’t make mistakes in life, and I disagree with it. Mistakes are inevitable you can't avoid them, but they can shape you a better person.. For example, if you teacher gave you low grades for a school project that is assigned, you should not just look at the grades but also learn from the mistakes you did.

Making new friends! They are vital in your life because they are always around you. When they’re suffering, you should comfort them with a smile with your heart. Keep promises if your friends tell you their secrets.

Sometimes when you are alone at home, you think that you’re isolated from the world. However, if you try to look around you, you’ll find something interesting. For example, watch for rainbows and falling stars. Rainbows are colorful and they can make you happy. When you see a falling star, make a wish because it is believed that when you make a wish to a falling star, your dreams will come true. Moreover, you can listen to the raindrops too because their sounds are lovely and natural, and they can moderate your emotions.

In your life spans, you must achieve some of your goals. If you don’t have desires, there’s no point of living a in a life. I always think that when a person is born to earth, he/she has a mission needed to accomplish. It doesn’t necessarily mean you must be a rich person or an authority, but to do something you won’t regret when you die.

In conclusion, the meaning of life is to fight for what we want the most, achieve our goals, learn through our mistakes and always discover new things about the world. We also need to make the others happy and love ourselves too. We must "build" something that will last and don't be afraid to be afraid. We must satisfy our needs but never forget that we're humans and never forget that life brings a lot of pain but that can help us realize that we're nothing more than a drop in the ocean of the universe.

Answer 1

The University Named Life

Life is not about comparing. Life is not about how to become the richest person in the world. Life is for enjoying. This is how I view life. I often hear people say something like, “My life is unfair, it’s sad.” In my opinion, I think that they just don’t understand the true meaning of it and how to enjoy life. Or maybe it’s just me who is too sensitive to think about these things. What I’m trying to say is life unpredictable, and it’s a combination of happiness and sadness.

A lot of people think that we shouldn’t make mistakes in life, and I disagree. Mistakes are inevitable, you can't avoid them, but they help to shape you into a better person. For example, if your teacher gave you a low grades for a school project that is assigned, you should not just look at the grade but also learn from the mistakes you made.

Making new friends! They are vital in your life because they are always around you. When they’re suffering, you should comfort them with a smile and with your heart. Keep confidences if your friends tell you their secrets.

Sometimes when you are alone at home, you think that you’re isolated from the world. However, if you try to look around you, you’ll find something interesting. For example, watch for rainbows and falling stars. Rainbows are colorful and they can make you happy. When you see a falling star, make a wish because it is believed that when you make a wish on a falling star, your dreams will come true. Moreover, you can listen to the raindrops, the sound is lovely and natural, and it can modify your emotions.

In your life span, you must achieve some of your goals. If you don’t have desires, there’s no point living a life. I always think that when a person is born on earth, he/she has a mission that needs to be accomplished. It doesn’t necessarily mean you must be a rich person or in a position of authority, but to do something you won’t regret when you die.

In conclusion, the meaning of life is to fight for what we want the most, achieve our goals, learn through our mistakes and always discover new things about the world. We also need to make others happy and love ourselves too. We must "build" something that will last and don't be afraid to be afraid. We must satisfy our needs but never forget that we're humans and never forget that life brings a lot of pain but that can help us realize that we're nothing more than a drop in the ocean of the universe.



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These three things could expand your essay to at least 2 more pages if you think them through. I have corrected the grammatical errors in the original. Please read through to see if you get more ideas to expand your essay.

Life is not about comparing. – Why, what are the consequences of comparing yourself to another person or your life to someone else’s?

Life is not about how to become the richest person in the world.- why not? What is the harm? What are the consequences of having the goal of becoming rich? What are you missing out on?

Life is for enjoying.- What if you enjoy working? What other things can be enjoyed? Family? Sightseeing? Traveling?

Answer 2

"A lot of people think that we shouldn’t make mistakes in life, and I disagree with it. Mistakes are inevitable you can't avoid them, but they can shape you a better person.. For example, if you teacher gave you low grades for a school project that is assigned, you should not just look at the grades but also learn from the mistakes you did."

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