English - Can you hep me with this sentence?

Question

Alright, so I am doing an essay on the case study of Dora by Sigmund Freud and one of my sentences is:

"This manipulation caused by Freud not only applies to the various situations in which he tries to analyze, but also, to Dora herself"

Does this make sense? and how can I make it better?

Mainly what I am trying to say is that there are a variety of different situations in which Freud manipulates before analyzing (such as Dora's dreams, Dora's stories of what happened, Her father speaking to Freud, etc..) but he also tries to manipulate Dora herself. He feeds information to Dora with theories and a intriguing way which makes Dora believe him to be correct about her situation even though he may not be.

All help appreciated, Thanks

Answer 1

Freud manipulated Dora by feeding her intriguing information obtained from her father, her dreams and from his own theories, causing Dora to believe Freud's incorrect assumtions about her situation.

Answer 2

Make it active.

Freud not only manipulates Dora's dreams and stories, but he even manipulates Dora.

Answer 3

This manipulation caused by Freud not only applies to the various situations in which he tries to analyze, but also directly to Dora herself.

I think this clarifies.

Answer 4

Freud's manipulation applies to various analytical situations, as well as to Dora's particular case...

Answer 5

I think it's fine but lose the commas they aren't necessary

Answer 6

The first sentence might be improved by removing the word "in"  

It would read:  "This manipulation caused by Freud not only applies to the various situations which he tries to analyze, but also to Dora herself".

My suggestion applies only to that first sentence. I really like the way you expressed the rest of your opinions.

Answer 7

when you say "caused by freud" that sound awkward... so maybe you could say "this manipulation that freud caused..."

Best of Luck

~a.dani

Answer 8

When Freud analyzes Dora, in various situation he manipulates himself.

Answer 9

Word it as follows:

'This manipulation caused by Freud, not only applies to the various situations in which he tries to analyze, but also to Dora herself.'

...there you go.  Now it sounds great.