Entrance essay?!?! HELP ASAP?

Question

Im applying to ninth grade at a new competitive private school.

I have to answer a few questions in a short essay.

Im having trouble starting off/answering this question..

What do you think you could contribute to our school?

What is a really strong way to start off?

What do you think I could include to impress the admissions staff?

Answer 1

do not go to private school.

but if you like have fun

have a good day

Answer 2

me too i need help too

Answer 3

i'm so jealous that you're stressing about your school. I only wish that I was in the same situation at your age but sometimes life throws you mountains,then hills, a desert full of cactuses and an ocean with a HUGE... shark!

Enough nonesense... here's some help for you..

Start off with: (choose one or just mix them all in)

-How this question made you feel

-What does "contribution" mean to you

-A famous (doesn't have to be famous... someone patriotic... and such)  man/woman pref. someone you idolized... what he/she contributed to society (an act that  you yourself believe you will be able to do if you really work hard on it) OR a PERSON that went to the same school and made something out of himself...

(Probably a pargh. 5 to 8 sentences)

and continue on saying " I am not the mentioned person, I may not be able to do exactly  what he did. But I am  somebody. I have a destiny  ( I know corny) and this is mine"

  . And that you are just an individual who thinks highly about her/ his future and attending this school is the foundation of that future. This is your contribution to yourself.

The best contribution you could give to this school is ...yourself.

-write about your accomplishments in school, neighbourhood, family

-how you can  implement these accomp. to the school

-you're sure that there are worlds of contributions that you are able to give and recieve and you will aquire this knowledge if given the chance.

Lastly,

-It's up to you.... Finish off with something heartfelt...

-Something real...

or...

Tell them that  this school inspired you to do better... That you pushed yourself just to meet thier expectations... because this school (you truly believed) will help you pursue your dream. That you pursue to be a doctor, writer, musician, teacher... ...  or just someone that you can be proud of and people can be inspired of. You are somebody. A somebody that went in this school.

Also, you can finish off with a famous quote or I usually finish off with something of my own...

....ok... you can take my advice and make it your own... or not do it... up to you... GOOD LUCK and I'm sure you're going to make it.... take care!

Also, these are just IDEAS... try to really think about it... try to think of your own... cause in the end... you really just have yourself... ok... keep on smiling..

_me_

Answer 4

Start with " Attending ______________________________ academy/school has been a goal of mine since_________" Throughout the years I have envisioned _______________, (contribution)___________________ and ________________." Start there. Carry the theme of attending the school as being a goal for a long time. Finish it with being accepted to the school would be of the long  acheivement on the long road of your academic carreer.

I hope this helps and I know you'll get in! Good luck!

Answer 5

Do they have any clubs or organizations?  I don't know much about private schools, but I do know that when writing essays for college, they like to see that you'd be involved... and if you're interested in leadership positions or interested in starting something new they like to see that too.

Answer 6

Begin by saying 'I know I can contribute... to the school' replying in full sentences is a good way to show you've understood the question. You should point out your good points, like if your a determined, optimistic or intelligent person you could say "I can provide articulated and logical views and opinions of ___" Try to include any extra curricular activites you do like netball clubs & stuff.

You can also include a variety of vocaulary. Instead of saying 'and' use words like 'alternatively, in contrast, also'. Make sure your grammer & puncuation is correct too. Good luck.