Essay Help Pleaseee?

Question

I need someone to read this.. it's not finished obviously. But i want to see where I am at and stuff. Please give me constructive criticism, i need it. Also please do tell me what I need to fix & things like that. Thank you :)

There are many people who have a difficult time adjusting to the real world, especially teenagers. It’s normal for teenagers to fall into peer pressure and stereotyped behaviors. Being in high school could be an exceptionally tough period in a person’s life when it involves different situations that may require many choices and decisions. Teens tend to act differently than what they actually are, just to fit among the “in” crowd. I believe that everyone has had this phase in their life before or will encounter it eventually.

Acting like someone else rather than yourself would make you a fake, wouldn’t it? The people you hang out with likes you because they believe that you are being yourself. What they don’t know is that you are trying to be someone else that you are not and it is killing you inside. In the end you will only wind up hurting yourself and the people around that accepted you for who they thought you were. Peer pressure is extremely important; you should never have to do something that you are not willing to. By following others, you are not giving yourself a chance to be who you verily are.

Answer 1

you can say one instead of you, you may have to change some of the other words from are to is, but that's what I do, one or people, or teens, or something along those lines, hope i help.

Answer 2

There are many people who have a difficult time adjusting to the real world, especially teenagers. It’s normal for teenagers to fall into peer pressure and stereotyped behaviors. Being in high school could be ^^ i would use can be^^ an exceptionally tough period in a person’s life when it involves different situations that may require many choices and decisions. Teens tend to act differently than what they actually are, just to fit among the “in” crowd. I believe that everyone has had this phase in their life before or will encounter it eventually.

Acting like someone else rather than yourself ^^themesleves^^ would make you ^^them^^ a fake, wouldn’t it? The people you ^^they^^ hang out with likes you ^^them^^ because they believe that you are being yourself. What they don’t know is that you are trying to be someone else that you are not and it is killing you inside. In the end you will only wind up hurting yourself and the people around that accepted you for who they thought you were. Peer pressure is extremely important; you should never have to do something that you are not willing to. By following others, you are not giving yourself a chance to be who you verily are.

I stopped like halfway through just use the words they and teenagers instead oof the word you.

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