Ever miss your manic muse?

Question

Common Symptoms of Dilantin

(working title)

That which I hate

I miss very much,

That electric, sharp,

Prickly touch;

Wish I could can her,

Pickle her,

Put her in a hutch.

Get her out

When I want her,

Need her, and such;

Abuse HER, not she

Me

I hate her

Till she’s gone

Then I’m the one who’s messed up

And got it all wrong

That itch I hate—

I miss very much.

(This medicine sure is a crutch)

Answer 1

Can't, never goes anywhere without me.

Answer 2

OH! You were the one who wanted Grannyjill to laminate the baby!!

You're into preservation, hey?

Answer 3

Like the fulfilled ambition of my thinnest mantras.......

Chants would be a fine thing.

Answer 4

You slipped her the pickle?

Answer 5

I miss more, not the dilantin or welbutrin but the maxalt is my thrall..

I need it when the migraines stroll in leisurely giving me the vision of a kaleidoscope effect and moments later rendering me incapable of communicating with humans, lights or odors.

Without this crutch I beg for a large rock to crush my skull or a cold brick wall to beat my head against.

A drug is a drug is a drug though percieved a crutch, It has its uses.

Answer 6

I like this so much!  This is very provocative, and your sensory cues give your reader a vicarious experience of how your Muse invigorates you -- "...electric, sharp, / Prickly touch;" -- and it seems tortures you all at once.  Paradoxically, she tortures and blesses you and you wish you could control her, but she is fickle, non? -- "I hate her / Till she's gone" -- and leaves you longing for her return, even though you can hate her.  You are addicted!!!  I have friends on Dilantin and when I read this poem I think of them also.  My own Muse is perfectly content to stay in the hutch; she will withdraw her holy fire until men withdraw their vultures...

Answer 7

I see where you are going but I can't relate to the symptoms.  Obvious you need to control seizures.  Would not it be better to set up why you need, then what she does to you and then close with the last five lines which are very strong.  Just an idea, and as always...trash if you do not like.