Excess of Elv s mpersonators (harsh,solid critiquing?)?

Question

saw a man with slicked black hair

chin cut in half, eloping eyes

He flicked his hands at mine

“Aha..” we shot back at each other

I smiled and said his smile was sweet

He said he’d copied mine

I shrugged and said I copied him

he copied Me

i copied Him

He copied Him again.

We danced in sync upon the sky

and envied either’s shiny shoes

We danced and sang in tune (aha)

And shot (in sync)

ourselves on telly.

no remote would let us change

The Channelling Disease.

Answer 1

Unusual stanza lengths but there is a poem here that speaks well.  My compliments.  Critique would be to work on structure more to allow the reader to follow (in sync).