First off, I "feel" the emotion in my poem, but I do not express it how the poem is worded. (I do not cut.) But this poem still is meaningful to me. Please give me constructive feedback.
A cut for the time you kissed me,
A cut for the time I cried.
A cut for the time I loved you,
And two for the time you lied.
Four more for the times I've suffered,
Thanks to your careless mind.
I should not have turned to this,
Because of a silly boy.
Yet even though I shouldn't,
Your love is impossible to avoid...
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