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Feedback on my poem!?

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hi guys, I can't sleep and I have a lot on my mind so I wrote this poem. keep in mind that I'm only 14 and I am open to any suggestions to makeing this selection better!

"words cannot express the pain, and tears do by release the anguish

when fake smiles become tiresome, and you finally realize that everything is not just fine

and dreams and goals crumble and dissasimble before your weary eyes

when all you want to do is wipe off the mask and reveal your vunerability

which will then result in further exilation and misscomunicaton

where can one turn to deface the humiliation?

families are torn, and friends will lie

where can refuge be found?

when red cross trailors can't house my sorrow.

and screams become unanswered

as if I am imprisoned, in a skeletanious chamber entitled the human mind"

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  1. i really liked it. it was really deep this is said coming from a 14 year old also

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