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Question

i wrote this poem for a guy im seeing. i usually dont write poems, but im kinda inspired. i just wasnt to kno what u guys think about it. any suggestions??? changes??? add ons??? thanks for your time.

you've brightened up my life

and you've been a wonderful friend

but now i have to let it go

this friendship has to end

my heart and feelings are involved

i just cant hold it back

the road i'm on that once was dark

is no longer black

you stole my heart, it's all yours

and thats completely true

i have to be honest, i have to say it

******* i've fallen in love with you.

the stars are his name and this is about me wanting to move further than just a friendship, thats why i said it has to end. its not about me not wanting him in my life. thanks

Answer 1

hey im really sorry if i kind of completely changed it. just offering some suggestions. i think yours is really good. xD

You’ve brightened up my life

and you've been a wonderful friend

But now I have to let that go

and move on to the next tread

Out of the forest and into the sun

who’s warm smile reminds me of you

You stole my heart, it’s all yours

That has always been true

You are my sun, I want to be yours

I’m ready to take the chance

I have to be honest, I have to say

****** I’ve fallen in love with you

Answer 2

That's cool.  As a guy, I would've thought that it was a poem to end the friendship, but at the end, it changes.  I would like it if my girl made me a poem like that.

Answer 3

Really Good poem

- Naudiaa

Answer 4

i liked the way u expressed ur feelings through the poem.i'm

really inspired by ur love 2 the person u r wanting in life.try 2

make such poems more with much more feelings.

Answer 5

Er. It's.. good.

For uh. Giving him.

Answer 6

i wouldnt say your friendship is ending but getting stronger or evolving, good poem :)