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First part of my book....?

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Here is my first part of my book;

The first time I saw her I was waiting for my other by the only grocery stor we had. I hid under the extra part of the roof, so I would get wet, because it was pouring down rain, and yet she was sitting on a bench, motionless. Her honey brown hair was slathered around her face, and from here I could see her bright blueish gray eyes. She wore black jeans and a dark red vest, with a white shirt under it. She had golves on, that she probably cut off the finger tips. What shocked me most was that her skin was very pale. It almost looked as white as paper, but I knew I was exaggerating.

Just then my mom's black SUV turned the conor and slowly came to a holt in front of the grocery store. My mom smiled at me as I pulled the door open.

"Hi Hun, sorry for the wait." She said. My mom and I looked a lot alike, we both had bronze colored hair. Hers was cropped short, but mine was longer and waved over one of my eye.

So you like it?? Id write more but...

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  1. its very descriptive, i like it, but maybe if u get it published u should check ur spelling(and yes i know mine isnt rite either but its for the sake of being fast and original)

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