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First verse last I think?

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Waiting in this silent room, for me the morning comes too soon.

The feeling of impending doom, consumes me when I see the door.

I clasp my hands, s***w up my eyes, I beg the sun, “Please do not rise.”

I tell myself but I know It’s lies, the door will open just once more.

And when they come with cross and book, and chants and prayers to bore.

Ill tell them “ No“ and go before.

This was supposed to be the first verse of a poem, but I can’t think of any thing

to say in the second verse. I think I have written the last verse first.

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  1. I think you should use that first line as the first line of your poem, then echo it again at start of (this) the last stanza, as a way to bring the poem back around to its conclusion.  

    The rest of the poem could sort of explain the situation your speaker is in more fully -- like why the sense of "impending doom" when the morning comes, why it's "lies" to say the door will open once more, etc.

    This stanza gives me the impression of someone awaiting execution by the Inquisition.


  2. Second verse could be "An agony of the night and/or day before..."...then you can show the whole story right back to the beginning!

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