Criteria for the Partenza Represa
http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/flight-of-the-fledgling-a-partenza-represa-an-original-form/
This is my rewrite of PreK and a refinement of the form. Is it better?
Flight of the Fledgling (a Partenza Represa)
Poor mother bird; she did not cry
she did not cry until that day
until that day she knew he'd fly
she knew he'd fly so far away
Though very sad, she knew he'd leave
she knew he'd leave to seek new heights
to seek new heights within the stars
within the stars he'd spend his nights
She knew that it was for the best
was for the best to help him grow
to help him grow and free his mind
and free his mind with thoughts that flow
But, then his fledgling wings did pause
did pause before he could take flight
before he could take flight he thought
he thought he just might die of fright
He feared that if he flew too high
too high that he just might get tossed
get tossed into a scary world
a scary world and then be lost
His mournful pleas, they touched her heart
her heart, steadfast, did break that day
that day she sent her little bird
she sent her little bird away
It's with her strength, he'll find his place
he'll find his place, achieve his goal
achieve his goal to reach the stars
to reach the stars within his soul
So, from her nest she gave a nudge
she gave a nudge to help him to fly
to help him to fly among the clouds
among the clouds and stars so high
The baby bird then left his nest
then left his nest to stretch his wings
to stretch his wings so off he flew
so, off he flew to brand new things
At first he soared, he soared so high
he soared so high her heart did yearn
her heart did yearn of all he'd know
of all he'd know and come to learn
Then mother bird with prideful heart
with prideful heart, began to sing
began to sing of how her chick
of how her chick will grow that Spring
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