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Question

so now that i have your attention let me as you what do you think about these lyrics

so last night i put out a few bars of this and people liked it so i wrote some more so tell me what you think about it and for the beat i'm writing this to the bars sound better short

what do you know about

the hustle the struggle

the grams the fam

the pain the scars

doin life behind bars

the lies the deception

the cocaine resurrection

the constant meditation

the self deprivation

the natural medication

the unconditional dedication

the hating the waiting

watching your life fading

the money from the blood

the gun thrown in the mud

the good the evil

putting in work

for the people

the death of a friend

the biting of the hand

the knowledge the learning

the needle the burning

the academics the lessons

the burden the blessings

the heroin the crack

the 19 year old that died of a heart attack

the money the green back

the moving of a h pack

the d the bundle

the poor the humble

the flame the spoon

the spinning the room

the screams the tears

when one of your homies disappears

the funeral the casket

the glock made of plastic

the revenge the right

the cringe the fight

the wasted the years

the scared the fears

the cop the criminal

the reason is minimal

not just sayin forget it

but staying committed

the pain of hunger

the mistakes of the younger

the man down under

the thoughts the wonder

Answer 1

What do YOU know about them?

Answer 2

it definetly has a good flo

Answer 3

This is a nice flow right here all you need is a killer hook I happen to be a ghost writer i can hook you up with the a hook to go directly to your beat contact me [e-mail] if interested we can work something out i'm sure check out samples at www.myspace.com/hiphopslord  I can be a true ghost writer writer that's ghost i like it that way hit me up if you need anything lyric wise i also do comedy writes samples at the page

Answer 4

very good the flow is dope

8/10

Answer 5

* Leaves thread *

Answer 6

i like it, i just think it was a little boring cause you were pretty much just listing things off. but you can kind of see a story behind it, which i really like.

Answer 7

it's pretty dope

Answer 8

it was better than alot of rappers out there today.. u have to bring something new to the table if u really want to make it in the industry.. there are alot of people who have flo that are plain while they rap and never make it  

Answer 9

nice ;)

Answer 10

What Peanut said.

Answer 11

thats dope

Answer 12

Crack is Wack!

Answer 13

Rick J, Try Taking off the "The"s itll come out more powerful, i learned that in grade 9 poetry class, (at least the ones that arent comparing. ex. leave "the cop the criminal" as it is, change "the pain of hunger" to "pain of hunger".

besides that its really good. stay posted for my freestyle, tell me what you think of it, ill come back and post a link to it.

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Rick Ross, youre a b*tch. first of all, educate yourself before trying to talk about life. cause according to your freestyle, you know nothing of it. 2nd, how the **** are you gonna attack someone's spirituality?? thats a ***** movement. i mean i know youre trying, and i respect your beliefs, but just as i respect yours, i expect you to respect other's beliefs too.

EDUCATE yourself first. PLEASE, cause the way youre rapping, you are neither in the "Gangster/Gang-banger" Category or rappers, or in the what i call "Academic Gangsters/Thugs" Category. and i know you want to belong to the second one and its good, i mean i encourage you to join that category, cause the other one is destroying our society, but you cant really join that category unless youre educated, and intelligent. and youre clearly not. (dont take this as an offence, take it as the best criticism youve ever recieved)