From 1-10 what would you rate this poem?

Question

Another day has come and gone

Another mistake

Why do we fear

When we’ve done something wrong

Runaway from where we don’t belong

Just close our eyes, compromise

We live in denial

Cover it with a smile

Another companion has come and gone

Another maybe, proved to be wrong

We lie to ourselves

Say there is nothing left

Put our dreams on a forgotten shelf

And runaway

Start an ending and finish a beginning

Tell ourselves to stay away

Reveal nothing, no price to pay

Another memory has come and gone

Another moment

Nothing lasts long

We try to keep

It slips from our hands

All alone

We make a final stand

The truth is seen in the end

Another lie begins

Answer 1

One of the things that makes poetry really pop is it's ability to paint you a picture with words. The best bet for turning this poem from good to great would be to revise some of your phrases.

For example, you say "We lie to ourselves." Instead of that, use action verbs and descriptive adjectives to make a picture of that - "We drag the grey veil over our eyes."

The more pictures you can paint, the more ways you can relate a color, or texture or theme into your poem, the more effective it will be.

Good Luck!

Answer 2

Poetry is so subjective and I dont like it (the poem not poetry)!

Answer 3

its a bit messy to tell you the truth. its a good start. its better if your going to try to rhyme then stick to a pattern of some sort. eg line 1 and 3 line or something like that. I'd give it about a 6-7 out of 10 email me if you want any more help id be more then happy to help.