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Question

GODS SIN

WHO IS THE DEVIL?

On a raining dark night at 12:00 am on xmas day the devil walk the

earth.he rose from his final resting place. his body fill with scars

and

painful memories with dark envy blood running thru his veins.looking up

to the sky talking to god himself.devil spoke with a confuse but

hateful

tone and said " FATHER why did you choose those human over your own

blood?I try to preach your name to them but they only spit in my

face.I

did what you ask have I not?(the devil waiting for a respond from

god)ANSWER ME!!!! WHY DID YOU TURN YOUR BACK ON ME...........when the

human slang me I just turn the other cheek just as you told me to.(the

devil now drop to both knees and start to cry with tear fill with

anger)I LET MYSELF BE MURDER FOR YOUR BELIFE.I suffer because of your

love and trust for these humans. your plan was for me to be lay to rest

for their benefit.I CHOSE TO LIVE!!! I ROSE FOR REVENGE I WON'T STOP

TILL YOUR BLOOD HAS BEEN SPILL.(the devil gets up wipes his tear and

turn his back to the sky and walks away high and with a chip on his

shoulder. nothing but passion and chaoz burning in his eyes).THE WORLD

HAS LOST A SAVIOR AND YOU HAVE LOST A SON.BUT FOUND A

ENEMY.............

Answer 1

So Jesus is the devil, and God's son turned against Him to become His worst enemy? Interesting idea. Kind of disregards the ascension, don't you think? The repeated caps just makes me think of an angry person who has lost their faith and is furious with God, and I don't take it seriously. Revise and sound less...intense.

Answer 2

i dont know "what ya thinks". ask him or her.

I think, you copied it from some where.

Good try:)