Good, Bad, Okay, Horrible?

Question

I saw a star and named it Jay and everyday I'd wish it's say, Cierra since I saw you smile, since I saw you cry, Cierra I've tried. Tried to win you over, everyday I've been sober, just so I wouldn't forget you. Cierra you're beautiful and I want to spend my life by your side, Cierra please accept me, I think I'm suitable. Cierra youre perfect, Cierra you're worth it, every second of everyday, you're so special in your own little way. Cierra I love you, Cierra I need you by my side, each and everyday--Cierra you're the girl I need , you're the girl for me, I hope you can see what I see....but it never does, the star never speaks, I'm in love with this star and nobody else in my galaxy. So now I might leave, I'll probab;y go far, far away where no one can hear me say, 'I love you Jay.'

Answer 1

It's Okay, I'm assuming the writer has not practice at poetry but it's written from the heart.

Answer 2

1st, give it a title.

2nd, its good.

3rd, Ur heart was very open throughout the (verse).

4th, U made it obvious that U love Ur name, and U have high self esteem.

Cierra, Ur message was loud and clear, and that is why I said  its good.. Keep on writing, and share Ur feelings w/ us.Good luck!

Answer 3

Definitely good.  Lucky star that you love them so much.

Only comment to make is try to break it up a little more so that it is easier to read.

Best Wishes