Good or bad??? Honest please?

Question

Certain serenity cast its shadowover the subdued moonlight,

Bringing hopelessness to all those who ponder it.

Countless questions fill the mind,

making usual responsibilities impossible to fulfill.

Why does it last for so long?

Why won't it go away?

Answer 1

Very Good well done you have a special talent!

Answer 2

c**p.

Answer 3

It was good but somehow I feel you didn't get your point across.

Answer 4

i like it. its complex

Answer 5

Good (y)

Answer 6

guuuuudddd jus cause im a rocker metal guy

Answer 7

its lovely:)

Answer 8

Really thought provoking

Answer 9

i don't really get it

Answer 10

hm... not good not bad either it's alright. i guess.what are you askin in the poem. to take your life away? it it. will you want it to last or is it something you don't caree for. i mean what is the poem about. are you depressed or is it your imagation.

Answer 11

That's the best poem ever [for me.]

Answer 12

i actually have an idea of what u mean by ur poem....its great,but i think its a little uncertain,u need to work on ur way of placing words and trying to convey a message through the construction and punctuation of ur poem as well as the words in it...it took me a while to understand how u wanted me (the reader i guess) to feel about ur words...also make it longer ;] i would have loved to read on.

Answer 13

i like it a lot

Answer 14

Some very nice words, but I can't help feeling that they weren't necessarily in the most favourable order. What was it you were trying to say?

I liked the couplet starting "Countless questions...", since it  made me think of this place, of course.

Answer 15

its a good poem!!!

Answer 16

i like it

Answer 17

It reminds me greatly of some of the stuff touted in the 50's and 60's by the beatnik and hippie movements.  Except theirs did make a little more sense.  Serenity does not bring hopelessness, it brings peace of mind.  Read Webster if you think differently.  Honestly.... not bad, not really good either.

Answer 18

Your first two lines are excellent, very good tone and rhythm.

Keep it up.

Answer 19

wow.  i really like it.  (in the first line, you made 'shadow' and 'over' one word)

Answer 20

maybe because you are emo

Answer 21

b*****d d**n uh.. good

Answer 22

Its good probally

Answer 23

i really like the first two lines

its good

Answer 24

Thoughtful and nice imagery.  

I'm afraid I don't understand how hopelessness can spring from serenity.  To me serenity means being satisfied & at peace with oneself

Answer 25

thats pretty good:)

Answer 26

I love it. nice imagery and tone. Love the sound devices used.  I think i get what your trying to say. Just expand on it a little.