Good poem bad poem?

Question

An open eye stares into blue sky

Stay unmoving as images flash by

Unconscious blinking as time passes

Concentration diluted, a mind expresses

A feeling of love, never enough

Tender lips await through tough

In reality it does not exist,

The real feeling of her rosy lips

Kisses parted, for another

They touch nothing, not even each other.

One slow final blink, back into reality

A picturesque dream forced to fatality

Surreal place of being, a dreamlike state

Noticing now, that it was all fake.

Answer 1

very good

i especially liked the end

Answer 2

Pretty good!

Answer 3

That poem was seriously catchy. It gives beautiful imagery which you then you flash it back to show that it was all just a fantasy and not how reality is actually like :)

Answer 4

"...it was all fake"

really good!

Answer 5

Very good poem, I like the slant rhymes.

Answer 6

'rawwr' poems do NOT have to rhyme!

One of the ways to completely annoy any poet is to comment on how it doesnt rhyme.

I think it's a really good poem :D

Answer 7

excellent poem (:

although passes and expresses doesn't really rhyme, does it?