Good song? help please.?

Question

Okay so my friend wrote a song. I personally think its pretty good. Lets see what you think. At the moment we dont know how to put the music and song together so for the back up music look up FL Studio - Fun little studio.

Here are the lyrics:

___You can make it___

Yeah Yeah Yeah.

Tell me about my life and how it goes.

Never had much but a pocket full of stones.

And who are you to tell me im wrong? Would spend

my nights with raggedy clothes on. At the age

of 12 saw my mom addicted to crack a

poor single mother with welfare on her back.

Rolling up her sleeves, doing dirty deeds, doing

the needs to support me n steve. I would look

at the sky and watch time go by.Think about

better days n never nothing less. Remenisce bout

paradise n chilling with the best. Every day

I'd think about this.

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Haha... Never give up.

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Yeah yeah yeah.

Gonna run away from the place I knew best

Leavin everything behind n find a place to rest.

C'mon guys you can do it too. Cause if I could

theres hope for you too.

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Never let your fears take control. Cause if they do you will lose

goal. Leave hard times and succeed your future. Baby you

can do it i'll lead it ya through it.

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Yeah it aint easy but I promise you can make it. They're not gonna

give it to you so you'll have to take it. Remember I got your back

so if anything goes wrong i'll pick up your slack.

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Yeah Yeah Yeah. Yeah yeah yeah.

Anythings possible. You just gotta believe.

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Music from youtube. FL Studio - Fun little solo

Answer 1

Great song but don't talk about crack  

Answer 2

Sounds pretty good to me.

Answer 3

wow, thats a deep song. i like it. its really good!

Answer 4

good song

try to harmonize it with a sad/emotional music that will have some points that that the music turns charismatic then have it go back to a slow sad/emotional music