Good story??? or poem thing.... not a true story tho.. well kinda?

Question

I walk silently into the kitchen writing a heart felt note to my parents saying sorry but I must move on in my life and I've got to get somewhere anywhere but here. I've got to claim my own name. So as I sneak back in my parent's room I give them a peck on the cheek then when I grab my bags and walk out the dooor I feel independent . Something I haven't felt before. I catch a ride to the airport . as we ride on by I think back of all the things my parents have done for me. I will return someday but like I said right now I need time to be on my own...

Answer 1

i feel the same way sometimes

amazing

Answer 2

I really like it... it's sort of funny, I've felt like doing that for a while.

A sense of hopelessness has been holding me back.

Answer 3

I think you could turn it into a poem if you work at it.  Right now it consists of a string of thoughts with no structure and hardly any punctuation.

Answer 4

I really like it... u r riting a story that has feelings that

lots of ppl have...especially me numerous times

Answer 5

A poem can be in any structure ,, does not have to rhyme , can be funny , sad , or tell a story . This is really good . What I like best about poetry is that it does not have to make sense to anyone but the author and not even to him sometimes . Think about some of the music today , songwriters just throw words together and tells the band to play loud .

Oh well , I have wandered off of your question ,

Yes the poem is good.

Answer 6

I recommend reading something beside People or In Touch or Us Weekly, then come back and try your hand at writing.

Answer 7

I really like it!!

Answer 8

I would say your parents did too much for you. You will find out soon that money and rich taste won't last long. Good Luck!