Grade my paper and fix it. plz!?

Question

Acting it out!

It’s the end of spring break and we are going back to school for the second semester. Got up the next morning and got dress for school and was looking at my self, I said to my self “Look at me I know I look good”. Like a concede person would think. Well it was time to eat my breakfast and heads to school also; I had a muffin, Special K bar, and a little bag of Chex Mix and a cold glass of milk on the side. I was already at school my then. The bell had rung and I was tardy, I walked in to class and gave my teach my tardy pass and went to my seat, well there was a big problem there was a little freshman sitting in the sit, I told the little freshman to get up and sit in the front of the class ya four eye’s. Then class has begin and this boy that was sitting next to me told me “Hey” and I said “What do you want” and he replied to me “I like your outfit”, When he told me that I was about to go crazy in that class but then the girl in front of me said “Girl you think you all that in a bag of Chex Mix”, just cause he said that to you.

Answer 1

im purdy shore your stupiter then me

Answer 2

It’s the end of spring break and we are going back to school for the second semester. I got up the next morning, got dress for school, and was looking at my self and said to my self “Look at me I know I look good.” Like a conceited person would think. Well, it was time to eat my breakfast and head to school. I had a muffin, Special K bar, a little bag of Chex Mix, and a cold glass of milk on the side. I was already at school by then. The bell had rang and I was tardy. I walked into class and gave my teacher my tardy pass and went to take my seat, but there was a big problem. There was a little freshman sitting in my seat. I told the freshman, Get up and sit in the front of the class, you four eyes." Then class has began and the boy that was sitting next to me told me, “Hey” and I said “What do you want?” and he replied to me “I like your outfit.” When he told me that I was about to go crazy in the class but then the girl in front of me said “Girl you think you all that in a bag of Chex Mix”, just cause he said that to you.

Answer 3

you have a lot of grammatical errors as well as spelling errors I wouldn't know where to start. You can print it out and edit it yourself.

Answer 4

It’s the end of spring break and we are going back to school for the second semester. I got up and got dressed for school.I was looking at myself,and said to myself, “Look at me! I know I look good!” Just as  conceited person would think.

Well, it was time to eat my breakfast and head to school also,so I had a muffin, Special K bar, and a little bag of Chex Mix and a cold glass of milk on the side. I was at school when the bell rung and I was tardy. I walked into class , gave my teach my tardy pass and went to my seat. Now see, there was a big problem there was a little freshman sitting in my seat. I told the little freshman, "Get up and sit in the front of the class, ya four eyes!" By this time,  class had begun and this boy  was sitting next to me told me, “Hey!”

I said, “What do you want?” and he replied to me “I like your outfit.” When he told me that I was about to go crazy in that class, but then the girl in front of me said “Girl, you think you all that in a bag of Chex Mix, just cause he said that to you."

NOTE:If I were you- I would replace the word crazy with another phrase- because crazy in this context sounds like you were you were mad, not really happy. I would add more. Remember when you are quoting what you said you put a comma and then put what you said in quotation.  

Answer 5

Con's- depending on your grade, im assuming your atleast a sophomore the paragraph is a little to informal and cheesy. Its kind of like first I did this and then i did that.

Concede person is gramatically incorrect, its also not the best way to describe yourself.

The whole freshman part is just one big run on, if you are going to tell a story use words to describe what you were thinking. Describe the atmosphere of the room.

The whole thing is really one long continueeing sentance. Add a definite beggining middle end.

Hope this helps, if I was grading Id probably give you a c plus.

Answer 6

It’s the end of spring break and we are going back to school for the second semester. I Got up the next morning and got dress for school.  I looked at myself, and said “Look at me, I know I look good”. Like a conceited  person would think. Well it was time to eat my breakfast and head to school; I had a muffin, Special K bar, and a little bag of Chex Mix and a cold glass of milk on the side. I was already at school by then. The bell had rung and I was tardy, I walked in to class and gave my teacher my tardy pass and went to my seat. Then there was a big problem. There was a little freshman sitting in the seat, I told the little freshman to get up and sit in the front of the class. Then class began.This boy that was sitting next to me told me “Hey” and I said “What do you want?” and he replied to me “I like your outfit”, When he told me that I was about to go crazy in that class, but then the girl in front of me said “Girl, you think you all that with that bag of chex mix just cause he said that to you?"

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this is good for a 4th grade level, id give it a C.

Answer 7

Spring break is coming to an end and students are readying themselves for the ultimate semester in school. The first morning back to school I get dressed, look in the mirror and give myself a narcissistic  "Look at me I know I look good" for motivation. Seeing that I was late for school I had breakfast on the way. Included in my nutritious meal was a muffin, Special K bar, and some Chex mix, washing all of that down with a cold glass of milk. Hurrying to finish the rest of my breakfast, I headed out of the car to hear the bell ring as I am running to class; time to get a tardy pass. As I walk through the door I hand my teacher the tardy pass and go to my seat. Problematically there is a freshman who was in my seat, I knew how to handle this. First I tell him to get out of my seat, referring to him as four eyes due to he wore bifocals, then told him to take the seat at the very front of the class. Just as class was starting, a boy adjacent to my seat surprised me with a, "Hey". "What do you want?", I replied, "I like you outfit", he said. As soon as I heard him say that I went ludicrous, but the green-eyed girl in front of me scorned, "Girl you thank you all that an' a bag 'o Chex Mix jus' cuz he say that to you!"

This was a complete reformation of what you had, ONE QUESTION what grade are you in?!! I hope this was a real assignment!!! =I MY GRD 2 U WUD B @ D!!!

Answer 8

Your grammar is awful. There are too many mistakes for me to bother fixing this online. Take it to a teacher before you hand it in.