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Guys.. What do you think of my poetry?

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When I get depressed I write poems, so I wud like to show u this poem I wrote months ago; tho I got newer, yet I think this is the most one I like :

My Life:

There's nothing more causing sorrow

Such as waking up alone tomorrow

Everyone I Knew, I Loved..Left

The cycle of my life keeps changing & shifts

Either happy & meryy, or sad & gloomyy

People... They're bad, They're evil

Each one of them resembles his or her own devil

I don't feel I belong here anymore

My heart is full of scars, my emotions became sore..

Here I am dying slowly like a rose starting to wilt..

Depression... for almost six months is becoming a usual thing I felt

I've been surrounded by those whose job is to judge

Each day, they injure me deep inside & I hold more & more grudge..

They gain that lame extra credit they get..

ENOUGH! Though, I always try to forgive but never forget!

There's the two-faced

At the beginning of every story, they make you feel embraced..

But when the end comes, you're just an old peace of paper..

Either you'll be recycled from life.. Or.. They'll use you later

What about a person's own blood? The one that cheats!

When you know they hurt you, you feel your life will stop to beat

What about that love.. The best thing I've ever known

Makes me wish to give my soul to him as long as I don't see a frown

I wanna see that smile.. that shinning million dollar smile

I know it might not last forever, but let me see it for a while..

This is not the end.. Isn't it? I know.. Life is unfair..

But one day I'll be walking on the hot sand while the wind runs through my hair...

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  1. I like the way you write it. But i don't like the way you describe people as bad and devil. If you hate a person,  hate only the person or persons involved and not to the whole world as implied in your poem.

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