HELP! i wrote a paper for class. I had to write a paper about secrecy. READ IT here!?

Question

please help me. correct any mistakes and help me add or rearrange things. thanks! by the way what exactly is APA or MLA style? the typed paper has to be in that style.

I believe that, sometimes, you should have at least one secret to hold near and dear to your heart. Something that no one else knows about, just you. It’s kind of like a little bond you have to connect with your inner feelings ad thoughts. Your personally secret/secrets could be anything. A small habit that you have, a crush you once had, feelings towards another person, something in your child hood or a way of remembrance of a deceased loved one. Yet, on the other hand, certain secrets must be aware of. Secrecy can be used in both good and bad ways. It is important to recognize the good and bad individually.

There is only one type of secret, which is kept from knowledge or view. But, many, causing effects emotionally, mentally and even physically. If you know of something or someone that could be harmful to yourself or others, it is best not to keep that information to yourself. You should seek attention, help and some form of advisor. It is a possibility that a negative action could take place. There might be other secrets that people keep to themselves to not hurt another’s feelings. Some, consist of 2 people having a bond, that share there deep feelings to each other. It could be a close relationship with a best friend, your mother, a sibling or your spouse. It is secrecy that is held confidentially to yourself, between you and another individual or with a group of people.

It’s just best to know the difference between the ones you can keep hidden to yourself and the ones that you should not. Life is about making decisions. So, the wiser your decisions are, the better your chances are to be led to the right path. Now, here is something for you to think about. Are your secrets safe to keep?

Answer 1

Ok i fixed it for you, read it and see if you like it. ((: hope i helped.

I believe that, sometimes, you should have at least one secret to hold near and dear to your heart. A secret that no one else knows about, but your conscience. It is kind of like a little bond you have to connect with your inner feelings and thoughts. Your personal secret(s) could be anything. For instance, a habit that you may have, a former crush, hidden feelings towards another person, an event in your childhood, or the way you remember deceased loved one. Yet, on the other hand, certain secrets must be aware of. Secrecy can be used in both, good and bad ways. It is important to recognize the difference between these two extremes..

There is only one type of secret, which is kept from knowledge or view. But, many, causing effects emotionally, mentally, and even physically. If you know of something or someone that could be harmful to yourself or others, it is best not to keep that information to yourself. You should seek attention, become some form of an advisor. It is a possibility that a negative action could take place if you keep this malicious secret. There might be other secrets that people keep to themselves to not hurt another’s feelings. Some, consist of two people having a bond, that share their deep feelings to each other. It could be a close relationship with a best friend, your mother, a sibling or your spouse. It is secrecy that is held confidentially to yourself, between you and another individual or with a group of people.

You should be aware of the difference between who you should tell and not tell of you secret, because you never know if it will ever back fire on you. Life is about making decisions. So, the wiser your decisions are, the better your chances are to be led to the right path. Now, here is something for you to think about. Are your secrets safe to keep?

Answer 2

You should add more concrete examples. For example, you shouldn't say, "It is a possibility that a negative action could take place." That sentence is way too vague.

Instead, give examples, both good and bad: If you find out that a friend is thinking about suicide, but she swears you to secrecy, what do you do? That's something where keeping the secret could have serious consequences. But if your best friend has a secret crush, or secretly hates someone at school, that's a good secret to keep.

Working through real-life examples like that, and explaining exactly what would happen if you kept the secret or told the secret in those situations, is a lot more informative than just saying, "Secrecy can be used in both good and bad ways."

APA and MLA style talk about how you should format your paper and, if it's a research paper, how you list the references you used.

http://www.apastyle.org/

http://www.mla.org/style

Answer 3

YOU: "It’s kind of like a little bond you have to connect with your inner feelings ad thoughts" fix to

ME:  "It's like a connection with your inner feelings and thoughts". The reason is b/c u put bond and connect on the same sentence both of them have same meaning.

YOU: "Your personally secret/secrets could be anything"

Me: "Your personal secret/secrets could be anything"

YOU: "But, many, causing effects emotionally, mentally and even physically."

ME: "But, many, cause effects emotionally, mentally, and even physically."

YOU: Some, consist of 2 people having a bond, that share there deep feelings to each other.

ME: Some consist of two people having a bond, that share their deep feelings to each other.