HELP_PLEASE wat do U think of poem SO FAR?

Question

HELP- What do U think of my poem SO FAR!!??

Time- time hands spinning on a clock we try and try but we cant make time stop, Fly by minutes -fly by days -fly by weeks -fly by years- Fly by good- fly by bad- fly by happiness -fly by tears - Fly by friendship-fly by fun- Fly by life and now your done, What have you done? have you helped or have you hurt? made it better or made it worse?

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i have not finished it but this is what i have so far..

THANX

Answer 1

its really good. just an opinion, but didn't like the questions at the end. otherwise the rest of the poem is really good :)

Answer 2

The first sentence isn't okay.  Besides, what do you mean by "made it better or made it worse?"? That sounds not good. The title of the poem is "So Far", isn't it? But I think it isn't suitable to the whole poem. I haven't known yet how to name this poem, but I think you should change it into "Fly" ,or something different...

However, I like " Fly by minutes, fly by...". That's good.