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Had you found me, standing amongst sorrows, jealously noticing?

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those that entice your feminine interests, and were you hurt to find that I loved you, that I'm the prince you threw away in your party of blindness, empty is now the cup of your heart >>>>------> Diary

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  1. I love your Bouguereau avatar.  I also love your poetic words.  Although not broken into more traditional lines of poetry, these are words of grace and beauty.  I will look forward to more from you.  This is so bittersweet, such a theme of tragic unrequited love.  I love it.  Thank you.


  2. Welcome to Y/A. This is intriguing. Although you have not arranged this in a traditional poetic form, it is poetry of the highest order.It has vivid imagery, an intense, yet controlled emotional tone, and a dollop of ambiguity.

      Do you think it would be better to say "empty now is the cup?"

    As far as your dairy is concerned, I'd love to skim through it to see if this is the cream. I guess this may seem like a cheesy attempt to butter you up. Oh, that's "diary!".......Never mind.

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