Hat do you think about this poem?

Question

Does it even matter?

Category: Writing and Poetry

What if I just stopped, quit, ceased to be the person that I really am, would anybody care or even give a d**n, I try to be me as much as I can, but what does that get me, but a fist fight with my best friend. When im me im called worthless as a blank tome, I suppose that's why I got kicked out of my home. But is being me really this bad, I don't think it is, at least im no fad. But to them im nothing but a pesky moth, im standing on the edge and thinking of jumping off. If I took that final leap would it matter, or would I be just another splatter. I now hear a voice from behind; it tells me how im important, how im kind, my life now becomes a tug a war of the good and bad, should I jump, I make them happy, but also sad. I can't make up my mind, is it really worth it, or am I wasting my time, I hear the voices that love me stronger then ever, don't do this your too smart your too clever, is it too late to turn around, or will I have to fall to the ground, I turn around slowly and walk away, as that big bridge moves and sways, my loved ones embrace me and say I matter, they said that I would not be just another splatter!

Answer 1

this poem is so touching and  it makes tears go down my face

Answer 2

You're trying to hard to make it rhyme, and that shows in the poem. It could be good if you put it in proper form (not like a paragraph) and stopped the forced rhyming.

Answer 3

its life isnt it,its what we all have to go through, some more than others,its how you deal with it all that matters,i think its alright,deepish,peAce.

Answer 4

I think its deep.

Answer 5

i really like it. But maybe you should but it in lines like your first line for example:

What if I just stopped, quit, ceased to be the person that I really am,

Would anybody care or even give a d**n?

the ideas in the poem are really good.

Answer 6

I love it. Bloody brilliant! So evocative and the imagery? Wow! Wonderful work...thank you for sharing!

Answer 7

its good. just add some personification and break it into stanzas =]

i like it

Answer 8

its very good

*a little long

Answer 9

I really like it but the end is a little weird when you say just another splatter... try to think of a different word for splatter