Just want some feedback on one of my poems. It's one of my favorite three. Be honest. Not fishing for compliments, but things I did right, things I did wrong, how it effected you, and, in general, what you think.
Haunted Sorrow
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Haunted sorrow, shattered dreams,
Crying eyes, and a baby screams.
A soldiers tears, lovers mourn.
Love buried, hatred born.
Crushed by rejection, destroyed for fun,
A teen weeps silently, wet drops on his gun.
A single mistake, a million regrets.
A single mother, a new bruise sets.
A hope for tomorrow, fear of today,
Despair for the right, evil gets it's way.
The violence in this world, empty cribs.
A child with memories, a knife in Mum's ribs.
A lovers quarrel destroys, jealousy making a brand new grave.
An officer in the street, watching lives he cannot save.
A siren sounds, a town sighs.
A bomb drops, a country dies.
Save a life, lose ten more.
A tired doctor, Deaths w***e.
A fire downstairs, a family above.
A man on the street, loses his only love.
Soldiers fight to live, politicians payed to dine.
A toast to the bodies, in a mile long line.
Peace only remembered, words known to the aged.
A murderer on the streets, a poor man is caged.
This generation forgot, what a fair world is.
The next, not so lucky, knows nothings amiss.
A reader dreams, hopes for the best.
A poet cries, hopes laid to rest.
Haunted sorrow, shattered dreams.
Life a lost cause, death better than it seems...
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