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hey can someone please help me my english grammar is quite poor and i need this coursework to be really clean english and grammar i've checked it through 3 times and can't find any mistakes but i need to be certain.

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How does Dickens use contrast to make A Christmas Carol entertaining and instructive?

The Book ‘A Christmas Carol’ keeps the reader interested with the use of contrast but it also shows a strong moral theme. The contrast between the rich and poor suggests that even if you have a lot of money and are without a family, you’re actually poor in a sense, because happiness does not depend on material things. After all, your money can’t say ‘I love you’. Dickens shows that relationships are more valuable tan business.

The first line in the book is “Marley was dead”. It being the opening sentence, you would think would be a major person that everybody liked and the death would be a major shock to everyone, but then the character of his partner Scrooge is introduced. At the start of the story you might think of Scrooge as an affectionate man because after Marley’s death he didn’t remove the name Marley from above their warehouse (“Marley and Scrooge” it read). However, we soon discover he is quite the opposite – mean and hard hearted. We also find out that Scrooge answers to the name Marley; to possibly point out that he sort of believed Marley lived on inside him. This is connected to how we find out Marley and Scrooge were both bitter old men that only cared about their business.

The first big contrast is between the miserliness of Scrooge and the kind heartedness of the visitors to his office when the portly gentleman enter the office asking for a donation for the poor Scrooge proclaims ‘Nothing!’ and says “I don’t make merry at Christmas, and I can’t afford to make idle people merry. I help support the establishments I have mentioned (Warehouses and prisons) and they cost me enough!” These words are later thrown back at Scrooge by the ghost of Christmas present. His arrogance at the beginning of the book is very different from his remorse later.

Another example of Scrooge’s hatred towards Christmas is when his clerk, poor Bob Cratchit, wishes him a merry Christmas, and all he replied with is ‘Bah Humbug’, This shows that Cratchit sees Christmas as a time of Celebration but Scrooge hates the time of year. This is the contrast between them. Then again it happens at the end of the day “You’ll want all day tomorrow, I suppose?” says Scrooge. “If quite convenient, sir”. Then Scrooge shows his meanness to his Christmas Happy clerk when he says “be there all the earlier the next morning”. Although Cratchit is poor and has a large family to support he is always cheerful and the reader feels sympathetic towards him. We find Scrooges attitude unpleasant and are hoping that he will change. In the Stave of the Ghost of Christmas Past there is a contrast between Scrooge and Fezziwig. They both have had similar jobs, except Scrooge worked for Fezziwig at one point, so you would think he would have a similar nature when he became a boss. Fezziwig appears to be a nice joyful boss who celebrates at Christmas and wants to share good things with his staff, where as Scrooge sticks to the darkness and gives Christmas a ‘bah humbug’. Scrooge is almost the opposite of Fezziwig, but he does admit he was a great employer. This is the beginning of memory influencing Scrooges way of thinking.

When Scrooge meets the Ghost of Christmas Present, the spirit takes him into the street where the weather is described as ‘gloomy’. This shows the main contrast in Scrooge’s life, he is a gloomy person, not one you would talk to and very into himself, but the people in the street are very cheerful, described as ‘brightest summer sun’. Dickens describes the shops in sensuous language personifying the fruit and the vegetables e.g. Chestnuts are like ‘waistcoats of jolly old gentleman’ and French plums ‘blushed’. This makes us feel how enjoyable Christmas is. Scrooge on the other hand, is a nasty heartless person. He learns a lesson when he sees how happy the Cratchits are although they have no money and a small home. They see the brighter side of life, even Tiny Tim if not sorry for himself. This is when Scrooge starts to be affected by the words and visions displayed by the Spirits. The Spirit also shows Scrooge the children named Want and Ignorance. These are symbolic of the life of many poor people and contrast with the opening section of this chapter. The mood is heavy not light.

In the final visit the third spirit approached covered in all black apart from a hand that sticks out of his cloak, Scrooge asks the spirit questions, but the spirit does not reply and only points forwards to a city, where Scrooge listens into a conversation between a few men discussing the death of someone and making a mockery of his death. (Scrooge does not know they are talking about him, or

Answer 1

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Answer 2

Right...

First, make sure you put 'A Christmas Carol' in quotation marks in the opening question as it is the name of the play.

"After all, your money can’t say ‘I love you’. Dickens shows that relationships are more valuable tan business." *I think 'tan' should say 'than'

"It being the opening sentence, you would think would be a major person that everybody liked and the death would be a major shock to everyone, but then the character of his partner Scrooge is introduced." *Change to "WITH it being the opening sentence..."

(“Marley and Scrooge” it read) * change to (Marley and Scrooge, it read.)

"This shows the main contrast in Scrooge’s life, he is a gloomy person, not one you would talk to and very into himself, but the people in the street are very cheerful, described as ‘brightest summer sun’. "

*This sentence needs brushing up.

Try "This shows the main contrast in Scrooge's life; he is a gloomy person, and not one you would talk to out of choice. Contrary to the people on the street, who are described as "brightest summer sun," Scrooge is very self absorbed.

Other than these points, just make sure your punctuation is perfect, especially when giving examples. You should use a comma. For example, like I did in this sentence.

Hope that helps! (:

Answer 3

You shouldn't use "you" or "we" in an essay. Also, you have used "you would think" a lot in the essay, and that sounds unprofessional. So that's the main thing that you should change. There are a few minor errors. Here's my version:

The book, ‘A Christmas Carol’ keeps the reader interested with the use of contrast, but it also shows a strong moral theme. The contrast between the rich and poor suggests that even those with a lot of money could be poor in sense that they are without a family, and happiness does not depend on material things. After all, money can not say ‘I love you’. Dickens shows that relationships are more valuable than money and business.

The first line in the book is, “Marley was dead”. As the opening sentence, Marley appears to be a major character that everybody liked and the death would be a shock, but then the character of his partner Scrooge is introduced. At the start of the story Scrooge appears to be an affectionate man because after Marley’s death he didn’t remove the name Marley from above their warehouse, and it remained “Marley and Scrooge.” Scrooge even answers to the name Marley; to possibly point out that he sort of believed Marley lived on inside him. However, he is soon revealed to be quite the opposite – mean and hard hearted.  This is connection between Marley and Scrooge points to the fact that both Marley and Scrooge were bitter old men that only cared about their business.

The first striking contrast presented in 'A Christmas Carol' is the miserliness of Scrooge and the kind heartedness of the visitors to his office. When the portly gentleman enters the office asking for a donation for the poor Scrooge proclaims ‘Nothing!’ and says “I don’t make merry at Christmas, and I can’t afford to make idle people merry. I help support the establishments I have mentioned (Warehouses and prisons) and they cost me enough!” These words are later thrown back at Scrooge by the ghost of Christmas present. His arrogance at the beginning of the book is very different from his remorse later.

Another example of Scrooge’s hatred towards Christmas is when his clerk, poor Bob Cratchit, wishes him a merry Christmas, and all he replies with is ‘Bah Humbug’, This shows that Cratchit sees Christmas as a time of joy but Scrooge hates Christmas. This is the contrast between them. Then again it happens at the end of the day “You’ll want all day tomorrow, I suppose?” says Scrooge. “If it's quite convenient, sir”. Then Scrooge shows his meanness to his clerk when he says “be there all the earlier the next morning”. Although Cratchit is poor and has a large family to support he is always cheerful and the reader feels sympathetic towards him. Scrooge's attitude, in comparison, is unpleasant and the reader hopes that he will change.

In the Stave of the Ghost of Christmas Past there is a contrast between Scrooge and Fezziwig. They both have had similar jobs, and Scrooge worked for Fezziwig at one point, but their nature as bosses is very different. Fezziwig appears to be a nice joyful boss who celebrates at Christmas and wants to share good things with his staff, whereas Scrooge sticks to the darkness and gives Christmas a ‘bah humbug’. Scrooge is the opposite of Fezziwig, but he does admit he was a great employer. This is the beginning of memory influencing Scrooges way of thinking.

When Scrooge meets the Ghost of Christmas Present, the spirit takes him into the street where the weather is described as ‘gloomy’. This shows the main contrast in Scrooge’s life, he is a gloomy person, people often do not want to interact with him, but the people in the street are very cheerful, described as ‘brightest summer sun’. Dickens describes the shops in sensuous language personifying the fruit and the vegetables.  He writes, chestnuts are like ‘waistcoats of jolly old gentleman’ and French plums ‘blushed’. This adds to the joyfulness of the holiday season. Scrooge on the other hand, is a nasty heartless person. He learns a lesson when he sees how happy the Cratchits are although they have no money and a small home. They see the brighter side of life, even Tiny Tim is not sorry for himself. This is when Scrooge starts to be affected by the words and visions displayed by the Spirits. The Spirit also shows Scrooge the children named Want and Ignorance. These are symbolic of the life of many poor people and the heaviness of the tone in this passage contrasts with the lightness of the opening section of this chapter.

In the final visit the third spirit approaches, covered in all black, apart from a hand that sticks out of his cloak. Scrooge asks the spirit questions, but the spirit does not reply and only points forwards to a city, where Scrooge listens into a conversation between a few men discussing the death of someone and making a mockery of his death. Scrooge does not know they are talking about him. He is referred to as a ‘wicked old screw’ and one man is saying he’ll go to the funeral only

Answer 4

I think you need to be a little careful about the premise that everyone likes Marley - he was a usurer, the same as Scrooge, so the fact that hardly anyone mourned him is not surprising. Dickens state the fact simply to show that everything that comes after must be a ghost story, but it is also the sort of statment that grabs the reader's attention - the hook that keeps him reading.