Have you ever felt purely?

Question

"Aglow" - acrostic etheree'

Flames

Ignite,

Reaching out,

Encompassing.

Freedom in the wish,

Lilting, exultant songs,

Yesteryear whispers tonight.

I spread my wings and roam the soul,

Celebrating the dance of passion,

Embracing my beloved transience.

Answer 1

I have been aglow before... but not of late... I do not know why but all I do is falter... and in my transience I hold the knife that cuts open many others hearts... ti is not that I have the Sirens power... I do not know how my life has hurt so many but it seems to hurt more every time I turn around. I want to help but I am not... I want to love but I don't... I want to die but I can't, can't want it, I mean! It wouldn't help those I am hurting already! And it most defiantly would not help my health! I will be fine, as soon as I can find a way not to hurt so many other people with my stupid choices!

Answer 2

I killed a gnat while reading this. What is the meaning...

Answer 3

Keep them coming

Answer 4

This is a good idea with many good lines that support it; `Reaching out' works well, though the poem does not carry this idea any farther.  `Lilting, exultant songs,' intellectually is good because of dancing/flying sense of exultant (< saltare, dancing, leaping); yet perhaps because `songs' does not match the rest of the poem, this line bothers me slightly. `Yesteryear...' is of course the gem of the piece.  

The last line works reasonably well: it gives necessary reemphasis to `yesteryear,' which is otherwise potentially obscure.  However, `embracing... transience' is one kind of paradox, and `beloved transience' is another kind of paradox.  `Embracing... beloved transience' is an off-note.  The last line falters, I think, in embracing too many concepts.

Lines 8 and 9 appear to be filler; I think this may be a case where the form detracts from the poem, in the temporary absence of good ideas.  But I don't doubt you will think of something.

Edit: I understand the idea, but I personally think `ice' also detracts from the poem; but please understand that I have never seen an acrostic that won my heart, and therefore in a sense have no basis for comparison.

Answer 5

you do excerpts of life so well.

its purely aglow.

for me anyway, things described are read visible here.

Answer 6

This form is one of several that you do so well. I am almost ashamed enough not to respond in a manner particularly suited to my demented talents: When his tail was cut off, the firefly said, "I'm de-lighted, no end."

Answer 7

Your flames ignite the feelings of wonderment and joy when you produce such pretty words that have pretty meaning to go with them.  It's much like I've told many people, poetry is not about writing pretty words, it writing pretty words prettily.

And that is what you have done.

Answer 8

omg love itXD

love all of 'em

Answer 9

This is quite beatiful," I spread my wings and roam the soul"

"Yesteryear whispers tonight"  Lovely lyrical, heart felt to be

sure. Bravo!

Answer 10

The muse is working overtime today.  Magnificent imagery and form. The fire/ice contrast in the acrostic adds to the poem's power.

Answer 11

Really now, this one's too good. I like it a lot. Such symbolism.

Answer 12

The poem is quite good..in fact I love it cause all the lines are touching especially the one where you wrote "I spread my wings and roam the soul" and the line where you wrote "yesteryear whispers tonight" reminds me of a friend because this friend would kinda say that too and it reminded me of that friend :D Did you write this poem on your own cause its so unique and it occults a beautiful meaning that can only be found by reading it more than once even if its not too long..

Answer 13

Skill, craft, meaning, ethereal soul, Dondi's "pretty words", yeah it's got it all.  Evadne thank you for sharing this