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Poem Madness - a monotetra

This life I live, is it a crime

to write with words that do not rhyme.

What I create's short of sublime.

I'm out of time, I'm out of time.

There's trouble fencing with a pen.

A dilemma 'twixt how and when

I write and tell of where I've been.

Patience grows then, patience grows thin.

So I'm left standing int he rain,

wilted parchment becomes my bane.

There is no time for poet's pain.

I've gone insane, I've gone insane.

Author's Note: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/monotetra.html

Answer 1

Insane is the formats you come up with and deliver on!  Have you ever tried the "neon" style?  Short, choppy, but bright! lol This is an interesting format.

Answer 2

I do like the way it rhymes...!

it is fun

Answer 3

1st line 2nd stanza... 'in the rain?'...

Thought so...

I think it works much better as, "Patience grows, then patients grows thin'... that is how a originally took it and it was effective in that form... but you are the poet... I am merely the little Siren....

Answer 4

he he me likes it..a lot ...make me want to sing....Ring around the roseys pocket full of toeys ashes ashes we all burn bodies! Weeeeeeeeeeee! muhahahahahahaha

Answer 5

For fun or not, it is well done.

Answer 6

I think it is good.  But I think you could come up with simpler rhyming words for the first couple lines.