Have you ever packed for a long trip?

Question

Immigrant

by C.S. Scotkin

Immigrant stares at the bed

strewn with belongings.

She cannot take it all, the ship

is too small for so many leaving.

Small trunk on a chair, reliquery

for her life. She despairs, clutches

much loved memories as though

they were her children, puts them aside.

" I will wear two sets of clothes, although

it is too warm." She thinks as she wraps a

Sunday dress in whispering tissue paper,

placed lovingly in the bottom.

Next, a christmas star, shielded

with cotton batting. Doesn't forget

the envelope of flower seeds dried

by her sister. Her garden in the new world.

Her trunk is light.

She no longer fears

the trip of no return.

Answer 1

Honey, I am going to the bar.  lol

You are weaving your magic well.  Another great offering.  My compliments.

Answer 2

Lovely write.  You took me to a place where my imagination took over and I became the immigrant getting ready for my departure .  Excellent description and telling facts.  I especially enjoyed the sentimental touches of the third and fourth stanzas.  Well done.

Answer 3

A feast of images!!!

Goody one above and beyond!!!

Answer 4

"hi!",

My husband and ny friends hate when I go for a jurney as I taje everything but the kitchen sink. Instead of just taking 2 suit cases and a back pack.

WELL DONE!

Cheers : )

Answer 5

A few months ago, when I was packing for the same trip, I asked in a poem, "What shall I do with all this stuff?"

The stuff of imagination is enough for me. I can dispose of the rest, perhaps with some pain, but I can do it.

So can you. You are reaching very high with this poem. It is very close to exceeding your grasp.

Answer 6

Very nice.

History is filled with stories of the strange things people take or leave behind.

One of my favorites is the list of baggage young Captain Churchill took to South Africa. 5 cases of Port, 3 cases Brandy, 12 cases of Scotch. It was a short war, after all.

Answer 7

I really felt like I was in her place, being brave and letting go of so many cherished things.

" I will wear two sets of clothes, although

it is too warm." She thinks as she wraps a

Sunday dress in whispering tissue paper,

placed lovingly in the bottom."

that's my favorite part, 10/10 for the poem=)

Answer 8

What a thought - what would you pack for a journey to a new world? A forever remembrance of home - flower seeds - hoping that they will take seed - the new ground surely will be able to sustain them - if it does not - then I will not settle there - for I must remember the gardens of home ♥

Answer 9

This is just beautiful in every thoughtful and evocative word.  It profoundly touched my heart and soul.  A moment in time filled with incredible pathos, captured by truly exquisite images.  Thank you.

Answer 10

good but some sweetness may please be added

Answer 11

Having spent ten years travelling I recognise the emotional pull of inconsequential fragments from a life about to be discarded and the anticipation of the not-yet-begun.

Lovely writing, I could almost hear the hum of a summer afternonn in a room with a ticking clock with curtain filtered light on the suitcase.