Having trouble with meter again, suggestions?

Question

Great ideas for poetry just can't seem to get the meter down! Does this flow?

Coffee Cafe'

Overtones of music

People causally meet

Coffee drinkers at tables

Computers, not newspapers

Everywhere

Sounds of expresso

Aroma fills the air

Answer 1

"Hi!",

It seems to flow fine once you take the comma away that you have placed after computer as, with the comma there makes the poem have a bit of a hick up.

I'm shoty at meter as well.

But definitely get rid of your comma.

That's all I can help you with, I'm sorry.

Cheers : )

Answer 2

I believe I said the same, but moved the jigsaw around a little bit. Hope you find it helpful. @\@

Overtones of music

People causally meet

Coffee drinkers at tables

Computers no papers

Sounds everywhere

Espressos aroma

smoke in the air

Here play with these  ,,..,.,,. lol

Answer 3

I like what Bob did, except I agree about the smoke. Takes away from feel of the poem by adding smoke. I switched the last line for this, just a suggestion. I like the poem a lot! I love coffee shops!

Overtones of music

People causally meet

Coffee drinkers at tables

Computers no papers

Sounds everywhere

Espresso aroma

sailing the air