Help a dude's Friend out - Tournement Deck Rating & Fix -- !!!?

Question

This is my friends deck that he plans on using in an upcoming tournement - please Rate out of 10 and Fix it if you want - if you have any ideas for a second deck he can use than please tell me a decklist to give him...-...he doen't hesitate to make a new deck, and he has nearly every card released..!

MONSTERS:20

x2 Vampire Lord

x2 Don Zaloog

x2 Destiny Hero - Defender

x2 Chainsaw Insect

x2 Cliff the Trap Remover

x1 Marshmallon

x1 Morphing Jar

x1 Spirit Reaper

x1 Shadow Ghoul

x3 Needle Worm

x3 Pyramid Turtle

SPELLS:13

x2 Gravekeeper's Servant

x1 Mage Power

x1 Magical Mallet

x1 Monster Reincarnation

x1 Monster Reborn

x1 Mystical Space Typhoon

x1 Soul Reversal

x1 Pot of Avarice

x1 Recycle

x1 Book of Moon

x2 Big Bang Shot

TRAPS:9

x1 Metalmorph

x1 Mask of Restrict

x1 Magic Cylinder

x1 Mirror Force

x1 Ordeal of a Traveler

x2 Robbin Zombie

x2 Cemetary Bomb

Answer 1

He should add a bit more powerful monsters with good effects and mabye a draining shield or sakuretsu armour, otherwise it's a great deck. 9/10

Answer 2

good deck. ill rate a 7.8/10 though i dont understand why u let ur opponent draw so often. that makes it easier to get the cards they want. otherwise tell him good luck with that.

Answer 3

forcing your opponent to deck mill can back fire really easy. i suggest using a more stable deck, this is fine for fun purposes, but for competition, go with d.a.d, glad beast, 6 sam, lightsworn, or anti metagame. you can check tcgplayer for deck lists of past national tournament players that use those.