Help me out and bash the h**l outta this:?

Question

Ok tell me what you felt when you read this like you were reading a lod of c**p or like you felt enlightened<ok to far but you get the point.> As long as its the truth no candy coated c**p :D

Is it wrong to deny what was never really there?

Refusing to see the only thing that's fair.

Tearing up every feeling that may have touched her heart

Making sure that her mind was always barred.

Still selfishly searching in vain.

Holding onto the ribbons like thorns.

She's become numb to that pain

It was my mistake to give up on truth.

Why are you giving into a premature truce?

Losing to yourself for the last time it seems.

Honesty was always there to small to ever be perceived

Tainted by their sins.

To pure to ever stay white.

Even god refused to save it.

One day it will shine just as bright.

Be brave little girl you saved yourself once more

Answer 1

I think that you could be a little more clear about the subject of your poem. It seems a little inconsistent; for example, the girl is referred to in 3rd person so it&#039;s hard to tell whether or not it&#039;s the girl being adressed in the questions and elsewhere.

Still, it&#039;s a well-written poem.

Good job expressing the act of &quot;soul-searching&quot; or trying to find yourself.