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Restaurant Review

Restaurant reviews help people choose restaurants . They tell the reader about the food, prices, location ,service. therfore I write two restaurant review , one for student newspaper and one for magazine for gourmet cooks . "the Roses" is a great restaurant for student and "The stinking Rose" restaurant for gourmet cooks. So You can check the best and worst restaurants in your city.

"The Roses" restaurant is informal and old-fashioned . The service was not good . There are two dining rooms full of too many people, for example you have to wait a long time for your food because the waiters are not fast . The food is Italian and all the dishes are made with garlic. And the meal was not served properly and it was not delicious, Such as the chicken was not cooked well, the soup is cold and the fruits are not fresh. Prices are reasonable. Appetizers are from $ 6.00 to $ 9.00 Entrées are from $10,50 to $ 15,00 .

On the contrary , "The stinking Rose" restaurant is fancy and trendy .They are decorated with many pictures and the music accompanies dinner. The service are excellent but, you have to reserve in advance .for example ,you can not make your order on the phone, you have to come. The chef has worked at many famous restaurants also, waiters are very friendly and fast. The food is expensive . Appetizers are from $ 30.00 t o$ 70.00 Entrées are from $ 500,50 to $ 700,00 . They serve a lot of delicious seafood for dessert, you can order seafood ice cream !.

Lots of all In my eyes I think that restaurants reviews are very impotent to help people choose restaurants. You can also check the best and worst in your city. It's like a service that lets you track all new restaurants and hygiene inspection ratings for all restaurants.

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Answer 1

OK, this needs a complete rewrite.  Not just paragraph spacing.

For example, let's look at the first paragraph and rewrite it.

The Roses restaurant is a casual yet old fashioned dining experience.  The service was awful.  The two dining rooms are overcrowded and the wait staff is lacking.  Therefore, we had to wait a very long time for our food.  Not only were they understaffed, but the wait staff was very slow.

The cuisine is Italian to the extreme.  All the dishes we sampled were floating in garlic.  To make matters worse, by the time our food arrived, it was cold and not at all palatable.  The chicken was still pink on the inside the soup was cold and the fruits looked like they've been sitting there for a week.  I suppose they felt the garlic in everything would protect us not just from vampires, but also food poisoning.

At $6 to $9 for appetizers and $10.50 to $15 for entrees, this restaurant (if you can call it that) is still overpriced.  Avoid at all costs.

Now THAT is how you write a review for an NYC restaurant.

Now let's go on to the next one.

The Stinking Rose may have a tragic name, but I can only assume that's to keep out the bridge and tunnel crowd and various rabble.  While it's upscale, it tries a bit too hard to be trendy, as it's decorated like an Applebee's or TGIFriday which is also tragic.  I was very glad the tragedy ended there.

The service is excellent, the head chef has a history with some of the best restaurants in the city and the food is fantastic.  

I recommend the seafood here (then describe what you had in here.) and for the truly daring, they serve lobster ice cream for dessert.

Appetizers range from $30 to $70 and entrees range from $500 to $700.  This is not a place for the faint of wallets.  In spite of their astronomical prices, seating is limited, so reservations are required.

Answer 2

Restaurant Review

Restaurant reviews help people choose restaurants . They tell the reader about the food, prices, location and service. Therefore, I write two restaurant reviews, one for a (or the) student newspaper and one for a magazine for gourmet cooks.

"The Roses" is a great restaurant for students and "The Stinking Rose" is a restaurant for gourmet cooks. (This next sentence does not make sense in this paragraph, you may want to delete it or move it...)  So you can check the best and worst restaurants in your city.

"The Roses" restaurant is informal and old-fashioned . The service was not good . There are two dining rooms full of too many people, which cause you to have a long wait time for your food due to slow waiters who cannot keep up with the crowd.  The food is Italian and all the dishes are made with garlic.  The meal I ordered was not served properly and I did not find it to be delicious.  In particular, the chicken was not cooked well, the soup was cold and the fruit was not fresh. The prices are reasonable - appetizers are from $6.00 to $9.00 and entrées are from $10.50 to $15.00.



On the contrary, "The Stinking Rose" is fancy and trendy.  The restaurant is decorated with many pictures and they have music to accompany dinner.  The service is excellent, but you have to reserve in advance.  You can not make your reservation on the phone, you have to come into the restaurant in person.  The chef has also worked at many famous restaurants and the waiters are very friendly and fast. The food is expensive - appetizers are from $30.00 to $70.00 and entrées are from $500.50 to $700.00. The Stinking Rose serves a lot of delicious seafood and for dessert you can even order seafood ice cream!

Last of all, in my eyes I think that restaurants reviews are very important to help people choose which restaurants to go to.  You can also check the best and worst restaurant in your city. It also provides a service that lets you track all new restaurant openings and includes hygiene inspection ratings for all restaurants.

Hope that helps!