Help! my poem, comments welcomed.?

Question

What do you do?

When you can't find your words.

When all that was,

Is no more.

What do you do?

When you think it is love.

You know its too soon,

To even have a chance.

What do you do?

When you've lost your way.

Your friends are there,

But its not what you need.

What do you do?

Nothing at all,

because this is life,

You deal with it!

Answer 1

I like it. That's a good poem especially for writing in one minute.

Answer 2

Those little comments at the end, "don't be to harsh".  bug me.  Do you want people's opinions or not.

I actually think this works.  You have a rhythm and style, continuity, and an objective. So well done.

I only wish I had something harsh to say  

Answer 3

I like it, I think everyone experienced this lol

It's good =] xoxoxoxox

Answer 4

I like the emotion in the first three stanzas, but the last one threw me off. I don't like the exclamation... I think it makes me think everything is ok.. I don't really know how to explain. I think if you went along with the sadness and hopelessness in the first three parts then it would make more sense. I just don't know why I don't like the last stanza. Hope I helped.

PS All in all, I love it! Good job!

Answer 5

Needs a lot of work.  It doesn't' flow well and doesn't make a lot of sense.  Like this line:  What do you do when you think it's love?  You know it's too soon to even have a chance? In reference to what?  I don't understand what you're trying to say with that line.  And your last part is contradictory because you ask "what do you do" and you say "nothing at all because this is life, you deal with it."  Well, isn't dealing with it doing something?  That's why I say it doesn't make much sense.

Your poem is like a jigsaw puzzle from a bunch of puzzles because nothing seems to fit.  Definitely needs work.  I hope this isn't too harsh.