Help please. ?

Question

okay, so i have this art class..and my teacher is making me write the defintion of art..he says it has to be about a paragraph or whatever...so i wrote it and i would like if you could tell me what you thinnk of it..k, here it is:

There are many definitions of art. In my opinion, art is a way to express yourself or your feelings. Art has been around forever. Art is everywhere, its a way of life. Most people don't take the time to appreciate, or even notice it. For some people, art is their world, its the reason they get up in the morning. Art is not something you have to be good at to do. And you don't have to be a certain age to create art, anyone can create it. Art isn't a contest to see whos drawing is better, its what you think of it, not others. This is what I think of art.

sorry that its kinda long..but if you could give me any help, or it i need to add, or take anything out, that'd be great, k, thanks : ]

Answer 1

It is pretty good, but I think that you should take out that last line "This is what I thinka of art". It sounds very childish when you do it that way. Try to end it with a bolder statement like "It is something can never be taken away from a person it is part of who they are" or something else.

Good Luck.

O, and don't forget to add a title.