Help with my cover letter!?

Question

Here is my cover letter (please help me correct my grammars and improve it!)

Robert Katz

General Manager

Lexus of Wayzata

16100 Wayzata Blvd

Wayzata, MN 55391

[e-mail]

Dear Mr. Katz:

From your website I learned about your need for a valet. I am intrigued in this position with the Lexus of Wayzata dealership because it will help me to gain more knowledge when it comes to automobiles. In addition, I believe that my education and employment background are appropriate for the position.

During my high school career, I was employed as a crew member at McDonald’s. It is because of my work ethic that I was able to become employee of the month and was promoted to crew trainer. I would like to bring my work ethic to the automotive industry. In addition, I already have a year of college under my belt, but since I am at a stage where I am taking some time off from college in order to find a passion in which I would have a future career. Maybe the automotive industry will be the right place for me.

Enclosed is a copy of my resume, which more fully details my qualifications for the position.

I look forward to talking with you regarding the valet position with Lexus of Wayzata. Within the next week I will contact you to confirm that you received my email and resume and to answer any questions you may have.

Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,

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Note:I won't reveal my personal information!

Answer 1

i believe i would just state i have a year of college and delete all after -- the term "under my belt"  is slang!!!   other wise sounds ok!!!