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Hi! I'am from peru (south america)

I have an English homework and I want you to help me, can you tell me if that composition is all right, or what can I change?

this is the text

Mariana Esposito is a sixteen years old actress from Argentina; she is famous for acting in TV shows such as Floricienta. Furthermore she is an idol in Argentina but in Peru is merely economized, even though she has a lot of fans in Peru.

She is a teenager, she is short and thin, she has long brown hair, almond ayes and big mouth, I remember that when she was 11 she has short hair, and now she has long. Now she is acting for the famous argentine TV show “Casi Angeles” With this show she is acting in the theatre, until now two hundred thousand people have seen the show in the theatre. I think that the best thing she has ever done is going to a casting when she was a child, because this is the reason I know her.

I first become aware of her in the TV show “Floricienta” she was 13 years old, and I love her way of acting, then I saw her in “Chiquititas” and now in “Casi Angeles”. I have never seen her in real life, but I really would like to see her in real life, I have been a since 2005 I particularly like her way to be with the fans, she always give autographs and take a photo with them, she is very charismatic and funny.

thanks for helping

xoxo

Answer 1

You are pretty close, only a couple of mistakes, here....

"Mariana Expositor is a sixteen year old actress from Argentina; she is famous for acting in TV shows such as Floricienta. Furthermore she is an idol in Argentina but in Peru is merely economized, even though she has a lot of fans in Peru.

She is a teenager, she is short and thin, she has long brown hair, almond eyes and big mouth, I remember that when she was 11 she had short hair, and now she has long hair. Now she is acting for the famous Argentine TV show “Casi Angeles” With this show she is acting in the theatre, until now two hundred thousand people have seen the show in the theatre. I think that the best thing she has ever done is going to a casting when she was a child, because this is the reason I know her.

I first become aware of her in the TV show “Floricienta” she was 13 years old, and I love her way of acting, then I saw her in “Chiquititas” and now in “Casi Angeles”. I have never seen her in real life, but I really would like to see her in real life, I have been a (fan?) since 2005. I particularly like how she acts with the fans: she always give autographs and take a photo with them, she is very charismatic and funny."  

I edited the mistakes that I saw, so sorry if I didn't catch all of the mistakes. I added (fan?) in the last paragraph, because I wasn't quite sure what you meant to put there. Either way, you are missing a word right there.  Hope this helps! Great job!

Answer 2

  Here you go. I corrected it the best I could.

punctuations. Grammar, Spelling. Format. And choosing better words for you to use. hope it helped.

Mariana Esposito is a sixteen year old actress from Argentina. she is famous for acting in TV shows such as Floricienta. She is an idol in Argentina, but in Peru she is merely economized-- even though she has a lot of fans in there.

  Mariana is short and thin, has long brown hair, almond ayes, and a big mouth. When she was 11, she had short hair, but it is currently long. Now she is acting for the famous Argentinian television show known as “Casi Angeles.” To date, two hundred thousand people have seen the show in the theatre. The best thing she has ever done was go to a casting when she was a child, because this was the reason she became famous.

  I first become aware of her in the television show “Floricienta” when she was 13 years old.  I loved her way of acting. Then I saw her in “Chiquititas” and now  she is currently playing a role in “Casi Angeles”. I have never seen her in real life, but I would really like to see her. I have been a fan of hers since 2005, and I particularly like her attitude towards her fans. Mariana always gives autographs and takes pictures with her fans. Mariana Esposito is a very charismatic and funny actress that someday I would love to meet.

Answer 3

almond ayes and big mouth= almond eyes and big mouth

when she was 11 she has short hair= when she was 11 she had short hair

other then that its good!

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Answer 4

She is a teenager, she is short and thin, she has long brown hair, almond ayes and big mouth, I remember that when she was 11 she has short hair, and now she has long.

Change to - She is a short and thin teenager, who has long brown hair, she has almond eyes and a big mouth. I remember when she was 11 she had short hair that is now long.

Answer 5

Very good .

Sorry for the spanish, lo haces muy bien , yo tambien vivo en Perú y amo todas las series en las que salio Lali.Especialmente Casi Angeles.

Your work is very nice,

goob job.