Help with my poem / fix it .....

Question

we used to live a fairytale

just me & you

now things are changing

can you feel it too?

i can't be without you

..or with you

my heart is fading away each & everyday

because it's you im addicted to

you have me under a spell

it's true

& i can't leave

i wish you only knew

but i'm leaving now

so come after me with that shoe

because i'm your cinderella

thats my little poem, lol.

fix the things you dont like, and add on

because i left it randomly at cinderella because im lost... help !

Answer 1

You are a poet.  You already wrote it.  How about this Twist

Once upon a time,  

I found another that held me in my fairytale

Time was a careless thing in that world

it never changes yet my feelings do

You were my Prince and I remember your stare

but yet our hour will not come

For my addicted soul will succumb

but my will won't let it

Can't you see you are the one

the only to release my spell

For you hold my shoe

let me be your Cinderella

Answer 2

I LOVE THIS POEM!!!! No joke *takes out little medel* I deam this the best poem on yahoo by far! Well that I have read. I mean cause even though the words don't always fit the meaning is there and it is perfect well the meaning I mean and that is the most important thing in a poem I think

-but I'm leaving now don't let me be free

-because I am your cinderella and you mean the world to me? does that work?