Help with poetry?!?!?!?

Question

i love everything about you, i love the way upi rap your arms around my neck, i love the way you slowly kis me, i love the way you lok deeply into my eyes.youre allways ion my mind all night and all day i couldn never ask you to change

as you can tell im not the type of person that does this but its for a really special girl i messeg everything up with and im tryin to just for her to forgive me it looks more like a sentence to me so i need help with it.

Answer 1

I love everything about you.  I love the way (upi?) wrap your arms around my neck.  I love the way you slowly kiss me.  I love the way you look deeply into my eyes.  You're always on my mind.  All night and all day.  I could never ask you to change.  (In other words...I love you)

Answer 2

right, you really need help. make your lines shorter and have time to check your spellings.

Answer 3

HOPE THIS POEM I HAVE WRITTEN TO LEND TO YOU WORKS:

______________________________________...

I know I have scarred our love by my stupid and selfish actions

I don't blame you at all for finding my behavior a serious distraction.

All I can say is I am indeed so sorry ~ I mean it truly from my heart

And hope you can forgive me so we will no longer have to be apart.

I love everything about you, from the way you slowly kiss,

Along with how you look deeply in my eyes - both of which I miss.

I wouldn't ask you to change in any way great or small

Instead it is I who must change and break our barrior wall.

So please say you will forgive me and know that I have learned

Never again jeopardize our love and trust I've once again earned.

Simply put: I love you beyond words and beg you please come back to me;

Never being able to hold you again would be my life's greatest tragedy.

______________________________________...

Good luck ~ remember to bring flowers, candy, and a reservation at the fanciest restaurant in town !

Answer 4

No offence, but you'll never get her back with that poem.  First off, it's not even really a poem, just a lot of sentences.  Second, poetry isn't supposed to be that straight forward.  Poetry is about explaining your feelings in a way that is beyond reality, far past what it really is.  You need to exaggerate and blow things up.  Write something that will make  her think about what you're saying.  Make it so beautiful and mysterious that she'll be up all night going crazy trying to make the slightest comprehension as to what you are saying.