Help writing poem?

Question

Me and my ex broke up like 3 days ago. And yesterday she told me its cause i didn't give her enough attention but she still likes me. But she also likes this other kids so i want to write her something.

Can it include like her name which is MARGO, and my competition is some EGYPTIAN KID i want it to include that. I want it to be kinda clowning on him but not really can anyone help. I really like her alot. It can say like i want another chance and that id be better than that other kid. If u need anymore details let me know.

Answer 1

I'm a part-time free-lance poet so I'll help you out, but its funny that you said "i want to write her something"  when really what you meant was "i want to ask a bunch of strangers to write something i can tell her i wrote".  but  i guess its the thought that counts!  =D

Kay, here goes nothin:

Once we were a pair of beauty

Soaring in the sky

Though soon we landed,

I thought  I would die

I'm alone on the ground

Stumbling in my path

For margo you aren't here with me

I'm caught in my wrath

Meanwhile you kept running

through the mounts and valleys of life,

finding someone new to fly with

no matter our strife

While in my shade mourning

I look up to our sky

and see you flying around

with some egyptian guy

please let go of him

send him falling down

drop him over water

watch him drown

i take it back

i made some mistakes

i want to fly again with you

over hills, plains, and lakes

i'll treat you better

i'll be the best i can

you'll be my lady

and i'll be your man

egypt, really?  

give me another chance

you're special to me

you're my last dance

come back

come home

without you

i'm alone

well, i'm tired, its the best i could do.  home you can pull something from it!  good luck getting her back! ^_^