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Here are some Haiku for my friends, can I have your comments?

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Haiku (strict 5,7,5 form)

Green gold in sunlight

Locust softly shimmering

Whispers to the wind

Winter cherry trees

Melted into fallen logs

Woods lost fragile blooms

Walnuts on the ridge

Felled by winter's snow and wind

Shelter timid deer

Ancient apple tree

With rotted hollow center

New shoots bear blossoms

The environment

A fragile unwanted child

Claims its mastery

Is it the home fires

A Brazilian cardinal

Appears at feeder

Warm weather welcomes

Rainforest fire driven bird

To northern mountains

Orbital island

Singular environment

Interconnected

Road kill, raven's feast

Pays for gasoline's high price

A different way

A botanist reads

Bible in God's Creation

All life is sacred

We breathe freely in

Waste gas from distant forests

That breathe our waste gas

Flowers choke flowers

How could they do such murder

When each has its place

Green world divided

Roots now grow haphazardly

Due to carelessness

Ancient touring bike

Black with upright handlebars

Is old man's transport

Blighted berries hang

Promises that might have been

Darkened clusters now

Blackberries' sweetness

Anticipated harvest

Picked among the thorns

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  1. Many of these are very good!  These would be great to give to friends.  You could make a card, using a picture from the internet, and use your haiku as a caption (except for the roadkill one, please).

    I love haiku, and improved greatly in my technique after reading the tips I found here:  http://www.ahapoetry.com/HAIKU.HTM


  2. this should be published if aint already.hey check out me at www.publishedauthors.net i wrote the book of poems,not as good as yours...Antique Rose's...

  3. Superb!

    There is something peaceful--accepting, yet wistful in your writing. Much enjoyed! :-)

  4. Wonderful!! :)

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