Here is a light poem for a change... will you comment

Question

Sun stands still

I have come to hug this land

Greet with love, the roughing sand

With my painted veil of white

I'll play with subdued midday light

To caress my children's cheeks

I wish to stay a few more weeks

Yet they hide from me it seems

Throw burning salt, into my eyes

Stomp my skin, the coal does fry

Pierce my flesh, the sharpened sticks

Would I cry away from this

If they would only hear the winds

That do thrash behind the hills

Taps the rain, and fills me dread

When it comes, I will be dead

Answer 1

You seem to write with skillful hand

your subject matter I cannot stand

you should write a happy ditty

and stop whining in self pity.

Answer 2

Oh, it's like so bi-polar.  I love you happygaelicman, you are so clever/ funny.  

Answer 3

It is very heavy for a light poem

Answer 4

Add caps in title?

Punctuate a little more for effect.

It conveys a lot of feeling, I get the drift.

By the way, if it gets really bad call below.

Best regards.